Friday, 3 August 2018

A rage of lightning hit the house

For this story we had to make up a scary story.
I chose for my title "a rage of lightning hit the house"
Read on and you will find out what it is about

A rage of lightning hit the house

 Storms were thundering all around America, gust of wind hitting houses but one particular house had been never seen before, The lights were out on this mysterious house, as Jack and Lily tiptoed in, darkness filled the air…

Creaks echoed the room, Lily squinted her eyes shut. Black figures appeared in the fog from room to room, but this one room was colder...emptier...larger… which Jake thought was the best room! Lily’s enthusiasm drained away.

The room was dead silent, all you could hear was Lily’s deep breathing.

Then smack, lighting struck the house.

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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous6 August 2018 at 09:57

    Kia ora, I am Zahnae from Matawai School.
    I really liked how you added detail to your story. This story reminds me of my brother because he would always write horror stories. It was his number 1 stories to create.
    I learnt that you create your own type of stories. It sounds like you do a lot of writing.
    Maybe you could paragraph your writing.
    If you would like to see my learning visit my blog https://zahnae.blogspot.com/
    Mā te wā
    Zahnae

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    1. Anonymous10 August 2018 at 09:23

      Kia ora,thank you for the nice comment Zahnae, I love to write scary stories too,I will try and paragraph my writing next time.
      Kind regards
      Stella

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